A Work of Art!

 To this day I have always felt that majority of the times I write, I’m thinking of what to write to make my paper stand out from the rest. Always thinking that this sentence I am about to come up with will make my essay pop like a firework, almost as if someone were to look at this line, they would say “Right here is what makes this paper.” As if the sentence was highlighted in their minds. When I look back to see how I have came about this amazing line, it is a horrible constructed roller coaster that no one could ever survive. Ups, with many downs, and twists and turns that seem never ending.

         With sharp turns and loops that will make your headshake like a bobble head is what I feel every time I write a paper. Making many changes to it to make it a smooth roller coaster so when a person climbs on for a ride, they will not have to make deals with god to spare his life. This process always seems like the hardest. I will bust out words so easily that makes it look like running water. Only problem is that all of it is in the wrong spot making this a bumpy ride that no one will ever forget. This is why people always say practice makes perfect. I always think that the process will become easier and easier that one day I will look like a professional athlete.

         Finally, it’s the time to take the roller coaster of my mind apart and piece it all together the right way. While looking at my final rough draft, I seem to have everything where it should go. Piece by piece I move along building the roller coaster hoping maybe this will be the most spectacular rollercoaster any one will ever seen!

Summary of my essay

The topic that I am writing about for this essay is should parents let their kids play sports because of the concussions rates. This is my summary from my rough draft; let me know what you guys think!

           When parents talk about concussions in sports, they automatically think about taking their children out of sports. Although the risk is high for a child to get a concussion if he or she is taught the wrong way, of course that risk will and can lower the risks of concussions if taught properly. The child would be better off in the long run instead of sitting on the couch and flipping through the TV stations. In the article “ Why Parents Should Let their Kids Play Dangerous Sports.” They talk about no matter what, sports will always be dangerous, and it’s a risk a parent is willing to take. Golinkin makes a statement in this article by saying “ He may break a leg or suffer a concussion, but he will be far better off for it over the course of his life then if he stays inside and plays video games.” (Golinkin.) When Golinkin states that in his article, he means that if a person takes their child out of sports, there could be more risk for that person’s child instead of a concussion.

Video on my topic!!

I could not find very many videos on concussions, so I turned to YouTube. This video is a student's project on concussions. I chose this video because it backs up my theory about concussions can be avoided if taught properly.

Just play

My topic for this argumentative essay is concussions in sports. I agree that parents should let their children play regardless of the dangers of concussion rates. My thesis statement is "Parents should let their kids play sports regardless of concussion rates if the parents and coaches take the necessary steps for the children’s safety." My arguments that I plan to use to back my thoughts are overweight, more dangers than just concussions, More safe if taught the proper way to play the sports, and many more. I think I have a pretty good grasp of this topic. I also have a lot of info on both sides so it should be a breeze. 

Hello, as you may all know I am Tyler. This is my second year at OCC. I am pursuing my dream to become a Physical Therapy one of these days. Unfortunately right now I am working at the wonderful world of Walmart. So if you are by come say hi! I work out in lawn and garden department. Im training to become the department manager.